Successful sport professional can earn a great deal more money than other important professionals

Essay topics:

Successful sport professional can earn a great deal more money than other important professionals

Nowadays, prominent sportsperson's earnings might be higher than individuals in respected occupations. Some people belive that it is a positive development, while others argue that it is unjustified. In my opinion, it is highly inappropriate and might have a demotivating effect on individuals working in essential jobs.

On the one hand, some people fervently belive that athletes deserve their humongous earnings. In other words, sport players have unique attributes and frequently bring their sponsors a considerable revenue, therefore should be adequately rewarded. For example, when Belvita decided to make Mo Farrah the face of their last campaign, sales of their health bar tripled, and well-known runner received £1million paycheck. Therefore, utilising athletes fame might bring significant revenue to his or her sponsors, so it is justified to reward them handsomely.

On the other hand, certain individuals argue that sport celebrities are overpaid, and there should be a cap on their earnings. They often point to the fact that other respected and significant occupations have been underpaid for several years, namely teachers and nurses. A recent report published in The Guardian shows that the average salary of a teacher is £26,000, while some football players earn more than in an hour. Therefore it might lead to an absence of motivation amongst the educators.

Finally, in my opinion, there is no need for anyone, especially a sport person, to be paid excessively. Enormous wages, high above individual's most ambitious needs, tend to have a detrimental influence on their life, often leading to drugs, partying and degeneration.

In conclusion, although well-known athletes generate high revenue for their sponsors and sport clubs, they should not earn more than people in respected and essential for society jobs.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54609929078 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9622136185 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578014184397 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9339241279 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.714285714 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1428571429 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112410329615 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0398664307341 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403994100456 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0699611265421 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386891872342 0.056905535591 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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