Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There are certain consideration of factor which everyone can take into account to investigate and examine whether or not successful sports professionals should earn quite a lot more money than people in other significant occupations. Personally I think that this is completely fair that successful sports players earning much more money than others. Because It has evidently has several reasons, which I will explain below.
The first reason coming to mind substantiating my point is concerned with this issue that reaching millions of people and satisfied them with success is amazing business. The best example that fit this notion is football players. Although they can play just approximately 15 years, earning millions of dolars is enough well living with high quality their rest of life. In addition, It goes without saying that there might be a risk to being injured and not to play football anymore. That is also why earning good money.
Another vital reason which deserve some words here is that the successful players are role models for children. It is imortant to consider that encourages children to increase interested for sports. A vivid example can be given to shed light on the subject is my younger brother who is 8 years old. For instance, he is fan of Messi the player of Barcelona and has made decision to register footbal team. Without a shadow of doubt, these kind of players impress not only children but also adult.
Having a considered all the aforementioned grounds discussed above, I am of the opinion that it is crystal clear two major factors I explained are satisfying people and being a role model for children. I strongly advocate my points owing to they are well enough convincing reasons form my approval.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 107, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...into account to investigate and examine whether or not successful sports professionals should ...
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Line 5, column 432, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...ootbal team. Without a shadow of doubt, these kind of players impress not only children bu...
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Line 8, column 144, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...tal clear two major factors I explained are satisfying people and being a role model for child...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, for instance, i think, in addition, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1464.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04827586207 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67168176849 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631034482759 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5646341055 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192895588392 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544665567229 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753873656927 0.0667982634062 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112262444426 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0983249746198 0.056905535591 173% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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