Over the past years, the high salary of professional sports people has sparked a heated debate. While some people agree that their high pay is fully fair, others believe that this extravagant earning is inequitable compared to other professionals. In my opinion, I am inclined to believe that every single profession has its own importance and must be treated equally, similarly, athletes who contribute to the society with their hard works and short-term career do deserve the exorbitant salary.
To begin with, sports people often have very short-term career of about ten years which required years of hard work and training. Athletes must put into enormous amount of time, energy and money to maintain their best physical condition, advanced sports equipment and hiring coaches. For instance, 76% athletes are reported to start earning money after becoming national sports professional for five years, whereas 88% do after becoming international athletes. Therefore, it is considered reasonable for professional athletes to get high salary once they are fully trained to compete for their nations in the international games.
Furthermore, this type of profession requires huge amount of insurance, especially for extreme sports, such as ice-skating, wrestling and snowboarding. According to one of my survey which I conducted in university, 80% of national athletes spending was on life insurance, and the higher the risk was, the higher corresponding percentage was. Unlike other professions, once athletes are injured, it could possibly terminate their careers or often stop them from entering important competitions. Thus, athletes risk their lives to entertain people and compete for the honour of their countries who do deserve high salary.
In conclusion, the high salary of sports people should be respected like other occupations, such as teacher, doctor, firefighter and police officer in the society, and they deserve high salary for their sacrifice of time and own health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...fessions, once athletes are injured, it could possibly terminate their careers or often stop t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, similarly, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1692.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52941176471 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8699583818 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584967320261 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.9907397199 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.0 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170146462074 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070226534078 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656051244014 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112487837425 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564977050395 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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