Task 2 Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Task 2: Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

Having a number of people suppose that music is a wise method gathering the humans in different cultures and ages. In my point of view, I agree with this definition.
Turn back to uncountable years ago and up to now, music has become a pivotal thing to humankind. In every nation, music is showed in a number of ways, through instruments and in much many languages but taking a massively general look, we can easily see the similar purpose of music that is showing emotions through music notes and melodies. For instance, music is used in enormous events like weddings, funerals, beach festivals,... or simply in daily life. So it is definitely an effective way to bring people into one, helping in improving and making relationships.
Firstly, you can easily see, music not only makes people happy but also consists them more and more. For example, in Viet Nam Tet holiday in 1 year ago, owing to the terrible Covid-19 pandemic, a number of foreign people had to stay here for a long time because the national boundary was closed. But they said that this was an interesting opportunity to known about Vietnamese culture. They also said Tet music was enormously vibrant. Although they did not understand the content of these songs, the melody made them want to dance. Furthermore, based on music, they could learn Vietnamese and made friends with different people in Viet Nam. After happy minutes, they gathered, cheered, and wished for a new year, people felt warm and sweet in heart and forgot all of the barriers in life, at least at that time. On the one hand, depending on music, in some special occasions, it make people much more remember about that. In funeral, a sad and slow song with respectful lyrics memorizes about a person who died; otherwise, people share their feelings and regrets together, partly calm the sad pains.
In conclusion, through the two indicated examples, obviously, you can see the huge advantages of music. It gathers everyone, helps them share their sentiments, emotions, regardless of cultures, traditions, and nations. And again, music is tremendously crucial, become a part of human life.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, so, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 359.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93871866295 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62062370907 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618384401114 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.613200227 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3157894737 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230154850923 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673939816805 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539251968754 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14326661361 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659727690846 0.056905535591 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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