Topic 2: whether or not some one achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a wide belief that some people’s success is mostly attributable to luck instead of their own hard work. I find myself in complete disagreement with this opinion.
I belive that only by perseverance and industriousness could people gain successful in whatever they do. Hard-working people usually attain their goals, it is suggested by numerous famous examplesin the world. Firstly, Bill Gates, obviously spent thounds of hours coding and experimenting to bring out the Microsoft which is useful software that we use alots nowdays. Another clear case of success through perseverance is Nick Vujicic- an Australian motivational speaker, who suffered from a rare disorder Which resulted in the absence of four limbs. Although that, He earned a bachelor’s degree with a double major in accountancy and financial planning. Now, he had his own family and he travels around the world tio inspire people.
On the other hand, fortune only play as a small factor of success. In other words, people can not solely be dependent on lucky to determine one’s achievement. For example, if students do not study to prepare for their exam, they might be not fail on this, but they never get a good mark. Moreover, lucky only appear on short stage or several times. So it is difficult to people can successful in whole life unless they are real talent.For instance, a person can not win the lottery for the rest of his or her life.
In conclusion, I strongly belive that in oder to achive objectives in life, one must be extremely determined and hard working to follow his or her passion still the end.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... whole life unless they are real talent.For instance, a person can not win the lott...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1334.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94074074074 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77413093944 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.677777777778 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3546143329 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2857142857 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.64285714286 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0768174295198 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0260626966951 0.084324248473 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427129731612 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0552086568669 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419520001393 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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