Topic : some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other, while others think that people have become more independent. Dicuss both views and give your opinion
In contemporary world, some people believe that we are rely more on each others while others think we are more self-sufficient and break out of dependence on anyone else. In my view, people have become independent today.
First and foremost, there are several reasons why it could be argued that we are more dependent nowadays. It is obvious that the cost of living is higher than in the past so people can not afford to purchase what they want. For instance, almost people and specific youngsters depend on their parents for help to buy house or car and tuition for students. In consequence. They experience more complex and difficult life so they need to rely on others. Futhermore, current people are ambitious for everything in their life. It is clear that they usually spend most of their time on working in the office, do some part-time jobs, they assist their parents and babysitters in taking care of children or doing household chores
On the one hand, some people claim that people are more self-reliant now for several reasons. Firstly, families are becoming smaller so people have freedom to live far away from hometown. To be more specific, our ancestors used to live in a large house with full of members but in the modern life, almost youngster interested in living and studying far away from their family. Also, they have an oppoturnity to chase their dream, do careers which they kind on without criticism of parents. In addition, the number of students who tend to study aboard are increasing. For example, studying in another country is a good chance for students to challenge themselves that aim for independent life and adapt them to new surroundings, they will no more depend on family in hometown. Sencondly, the development of technology also plays an important part. Having lived in 4.0 life, people can do everything through electronic devices access to internet. To be more details, people work online from any part of the world. For example, during covid-19 pandemic, all universities, schools encourage studying at home with some supported apps to maintain knowledges. Specially for officers who do not have to much time, they can control their workload in house. Working online and online education help people to become self-contained, they do not need to rely on others in accommodation or fees.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'relied'.
Suggestion: relied
... world, some people believe that we are rely more on each others while others think ...
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Line 2, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing is higher than in the past so people can not afford to purchase what they wan...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed to live in a large house with full of members but in the modern life, almost y...
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Line 4, column 1194, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
... Specially for officers who do not have to much time, they can control their workl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1942.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97948717949 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69828883853 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551282051282 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.6874987335 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.210526316 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5263157895 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29670405479 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924457187349 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107174782427 0.0667982634062 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293119733719 0.151304729494 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.200856277241 0.056905535591 353% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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