topic:Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Essay topics:

topic:Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

some people think that it is necessary to invest time and money in wild animals, while others suggest that spending this money on humans should be prioritized. in my perspective, people should keep a balance between the amount of money used for humans and wild animals.

On the on hand, money and effort should be spent on the welfare of humans, both in developed and developing countries. That is because there are a number of populations need to be given more welfare benefits. In terms of minority ethnics in VietNam, for example, many people are facing with the poverty and homelessness. Therefore, the local and national authorities should focus on raising fundings to help people to overcome these emerging situations. Moreover, regarding education problems, a big number of people in remote areas are less likely to access shooling systems. Hence, it is vital to invest in building schools and upgrade educational standards in these regions in order to improve people's knowledge and human civilisation.

On the other hand, it is necessary for people to spend money and time on the protection for wild animals. That is because wildlife plays a crucial role in the development of ecotourism and preserving Biological diversity, which animals can be protected and developed further. Therefore, the ecotourism is likely to appeal to more visitors which provide local people with a number of job opportunities. Additionally, various kinds of animals make a significant contribution in some scientific researches , especially in terms of medical research. For instance, people can conduct researches on wild animals to invent vaccines and drugs.

In conclusion, it is better to make an investment in both humans and wild animals to make sure the mutual development of society.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26666666667 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92136371985 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522807017544 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 482.4 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.3051392902 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.214285714 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3571428571 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42857142857 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259564056829 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874527867702 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087311258066 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16122456 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101325750953 0.056905535591 178% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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