Violence in the media promote violence in society.
To what extent do you agree?
Critics throughout both the developing and developed countries have debated whether or not mass media applying violence will cause violent activities in modern society. I partly agree with such idea with two-sided arguments, one supporting and another opposing.
To begin with, overwhelming promotion of violence in mass media, such as television and the Internet, can persistently impact people's mind. With the easily accessible contents promulgated by mass media, people, especially those underage, might be indoctrinated with the brutal thoughts when they grow up, believing that such actions are stimulating, and this may encourage commitment of such violent actions in real life. For instance, in the early 80th century in Hong Kong when movies describing lives of brutal gangs were prevailed among the majority of citizens, the violent crime rates recorded at that time were at the apex throughout the recent decades.
Despite the above arguments, I believe that the violence contexts reported by the media agencies could raise awareness and caution among the general public. Take the news report of the domestic violence or serial killing as example . By watching those details from news reports, people become more vigilant and get knowledge of how the measures should be taken when confronting similar situation, resulting in decreased number of cases of such crimes.
Given the above factors, I would conclude that media has enormous impact on our daily life. Broadcast of violent details by media can be detrimental to people’s mental development, but at the same time, can raise people’s awareness of crimes. Personally, the pros of reporting brutal crimes far outweigh the cons, which are avertable if censorship or parental guidance can be given to youngsters while watching the crime contents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, while, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49110320285 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77109905822 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637010676157 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.4084011804 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.272727273 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5454545455 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144336414228 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621328546272 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605618983934 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897834375544 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386771246709 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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