When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people choose their jobs based on the size of the salary offered. Personally, I disagree with the idea that money is the key consideration when deciding on a career because I believe that other factors are equally important.

On the one hand, I agree that money is necessary in order for people to meet their basic needs. For example, we all need money to pay for housing, food, bills, health care, and education. Most people consider it a priority to at least earn a salary that allows them to cover these needs and have a reasonable quality of life. If people chose their jobs based on enjoyment or other non-financial factors, they might find it difficult to support themselves. Artists and musicians, for instance, are known for choosing a career path that they love, but that does not always provide them with enough money to live comfortably and raise a family.

Nevertheless, I believe that other considerations are just as important as what we earn in our jobs. Firstly, personal relationships and the atmosphere in a workplace are extremely important when choosing a job. Having a good manager or friendly colleagues, for example, can make a huge difference to workers’ levels of happiness and general quality of life. Secondly, many people’s feelings of job satisfaction come from their professional achievements, the skills they learn, and the position they reach, rather than the money they earn. Finally, some people choose a career because they want to help others and contribute something positive to society.

In conclusion, while salaries certainly affect people’s choice of profession, I do not believe that money outweighs all other motivators.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'while', 'at least', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in conclusion']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233009708738 0.247107183377 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.15857605178 0.155533422707 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0906148867314 0.0946595960268 96% => OK
Adverbs: 0.042071197411 0.0501214627716 84% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0744336569579 0.0437548338989 170% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.122977346278 0.122226691241 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0258899676375 0.0403226058552 64% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.86760072029 2.80594681477 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0291262135922 0.0326793684256 89% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0776699029126 0.0861772015684 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00647249190939 0.021408717616 30% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0129449838188 0.011925033212 109% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1680.0 1933.35771543 87% => OK
No of words: 274.0 316.048096192 87% => OK
Chars per words: 6.13138686131 6.12580529183 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20517956788 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.36496350365 0.374742101984 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.266423357664 0.28420135186 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.211678832117 0.203846283523 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.138686131387 0.137316102897 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86760072029 2.80594681477 102% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.037074148 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598540145985 0.56093040696 107% => OK
Word variations: 64.1518863754 60.7387585426 106% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0891783567 81% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0769230769 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7012632987 49.517814964 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.230769231 127.492653851 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0769230769 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.07692307692 0.814263465372 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 47.7192588433 49.1944974215 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.38823529412 1.69124875643 82% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273232313713 0.332605444948 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0899424065 0.102741220458 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0571415177687 0.0668466124924 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.529556060531 0.534860350844 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.18088194731 0.148594505496 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103341746353 0.134430193775 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727911671983 0.0742795772207 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.225942750671 0.324371583561 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0916498569053 0.0638462369009 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165289188505 0.228012699653 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0956601315385 0.058150111329 165% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.5751503006 39% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.4468937876 105% => OK

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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For sure this essay doesn't deserve 9.0 in the view of e-grader. Look, there are a lot of pronouns as the subject:

Pronouns: 0.0744336569579 0.0437548338989 170% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence

and there are only 164 Unique words:

Unique words: 164.0 176.037074148 93% => OK