I believe that our achievements require a sea of extreme efforts we have made time after time. Along with it, luck is also a critical factor which has an impact on the outcome. Therefore, I only partly agree with the idea that people fulfil their ambition mostly by luck.
On the one hand, it is undeniable that we all have to be really diligent and highly motivated in order to succeed in accomplishing our dream. Success demands our expertise in the field we choose. So as to have such precious knowledge, there is no shortcut around learning and practising. Sometimes, we could feel discouraged on our way because of unavoidable obstacles. Nevertheless, if we can survive after a multitude of harsh difficulties, we are very likely to make major breakthrough. A case in point is Nick Vujicic, who is characterized by the absence of arms and legs, is now a well-known motivational speaker in the world.
On the other hand, luck virtually has a certain amount of influence over what we pursue and attain. It can be about how good the conditions we are in, or a miracle that happens to us when we are in danger or nearly give up something. It is still controversial nowadays when people argue about how lucky they are after they have achieved something valuable. For instance, many surveys indicate that wealthy people are usually more likely than those with lower incomes to claim that their success is primarily as a result of working hard. Nevertheless, I believe that fortune appears even in the process of working in order not to let them stop trying. Sometimes, luck can play a huge role in helping us to make breakthroughs. A case in point is when Alexander Fleming accidentally discovered penicillin in 1928, which made a turning point in human history.
In conclusion, the 2 factors: luck and working hard, are both really essential for us to reach our goals. If we never stop trying, fortune will smile on us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: To
...s our expertise in the field we choose. So as to have such precious knowledge, there is ...
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Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: MAJOR_BREAKTHROUGH[1]
Message: Use simply 'breakthrough'.
Suggestion: breakthrough
...ifficulties, we are very likely to make major breakthrough. A case in point is Nick Vujicic, who i...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, nevertheless, really, so, still, therefore, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76946107784 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82118712185 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592814371257 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9726445575 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5555555556 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0850510832341 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.02744071217 0.084324248473 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448508073035 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0594222705836 0.151304729494 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543076974253 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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