Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In today’s world, men tend to be more responsible for taking care of their children. However, some people still believe that women should be ones who need to bring childcare into focus more than men as they are better at childcare. In my opinion, I strongly do not accord that women should focus on raising their son/daughter more than their work.
Obviously, today’s women do not want to stay at home to look after kids because they feel they are counting on their husbands. Instead of doing that, certainly they want to use their earnings to learn a new language, go on a trip with friends, learn cooking. If they are forced to less focus on work and more focus on raising children, it is undoubtedly unequal. By the way, it does not mean that women can neglect their children and focus on work more than on childcare. It means that women have the right to experience new things in the world, to earn their own income but should balance between raising children and earning money.
In addition, childcare is the responsibility of both parents. It is clear that both men and women have qualities and skills are able to raise and educate their kids, no matter their gender. If we say that childcare is for female only, children will be under the impression that women are just “nannies” and the only thing their mothers can do is taking care of them. It could make children, especially young girls think that they do not need to be good at studying such as science because it is dominated by men, not them.
To summarize, it is important that both male and female should share childcare duties as they have their own qualities and skills. Otherwise, women and men should also be allowed to focus on work and become children’s role models.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...heir son/daughter more than their work. Obviously, today’s women do not want to ...
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Line 2, column 251, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to cook'.
Suggestion: to cook
...guage, go on a trip with friends, learn cooking. If they are forced to less focus on wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, still, in addition, such as, by the way, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65161290323 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43368658315 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.506451612903 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.2121748672 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1428571429 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448060512099 0.244688304435 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168911825692 0.084324248473 200% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787968481355 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291396414997 0.151304729494 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784963308465 0.056905535591 138% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 50.2224549098 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.