Write about the following topic:
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Sports have become a big interest to people all over the world. Outstanding players in this area seem to make much more money than people in other professions. This essay will discuss both sides of this observation and offer my view.
A few people believe that this earning difference is unfair for several reasons. First of all, there are other crucial jobs such as those in healthcare and the food industry. Thanks to these, people are protected from hunger and illness. Therefore, they can be considered the backbone of any country. Besides, thriving professionals sometimes do not deserve higher pay for their bad influence. Because of their high achievements, successful players have numerous fans who admire and listen to them. The majority of young people do not have much living experience thus willing to do whatever it takes to be like their idols as much as possible. For instance, when a star is found using drugs or has many partners, their fans might copy these behaviors for thinking that these are acceptable. In summary, other essential professions in society also deserve high pay. In some cases, successful yet misbehaving players are bad models for young people.
Despite the reasons suggested, the belief in this fair income disparity has become increasingly popular. Naturally, governments rely on healthcare and food services to ensure their people’s well-being. This is being seen particularly true in the on-going Covid-19 pandemic. In other cases, sports are important for their functions of promoting physical health and mental health. It also may be true that young followers are easily affected by their favorite player’s behaviors. Companies and governments can prevent this. Suggested measures are encouraging well-rounded individuals and giving fines and restrictions to those who conduct crimes. Furthermore, the high-performed players’ big sum usually comes from corporates’ sponsorship. This means that they could get a second generous income by becoming a brand ambassador or appearing in advertisements. In brief, sports are beneficial in regular situations and if invested rightly an excellent and responsible professional can make a huge impact too.
In conclusion, it is pretty fair for sports talents to make bigger earnings than those in other areas. At the same time, from my perspective, governments and companies can help to prevent cases when players take advantage of their fame. For example, salary restrictions should be put in place. Companies can also learn to take extra steps before choosing their brand’s representative. It should be someone who is not only good at scoring but also has a positive lifestyle and a responsible attitude.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 247, Rule ID: ON-GOING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
... is being seen particularly true in the on-going Covid-19 pandemic. In other cases, spor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in brief, in conclusion, in summary, such as, first of all, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2284.0 1615.20841683 141% => OK
No of words: 425.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37411764706 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94424874833 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 176.041082164 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595294117647 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 16.0721442886 174% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0450068952 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.5714285714 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1785714286 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241589301009 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587354487276 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050798021519 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153829280714 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0702655445852 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.27 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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