Adults do very less exercise these days. Some people think that showing sporting events on the
television such as Olympics and international tournaments can be the best way to encourage adults to
do exercise.
Others believe there are other effective ways to do so.
Discuss both views and state your opinion. Support with relevant examples.
It is true that doing exercise more important in mature age to maintain healthy life and want some mortivate to do so. Some people believe that promote sport events on television make adults to do exercises and other believe there are other alternatives better than that. This essay will discuss both point of views and totally agree with that, there are better and effective ways to encourage mature people to do physical activities.
Firstly, there are number of sports channels such as ESPN, Start Sports and Ten Sports showing sport games, events all around the world. Most of the old people watch those television channels for a number of hours without doing anything. Moreover, as for the recent studies of BMC public health center it is clear that watching elite athletes have no role in promotion of exercise in adults but will lead to high risk of obesity.
However, improving sport facilities, cheap or free gyms and social events can do the change what we wish for since old people will come and then do the physical activities in there. Hence, then they do not want to spend money, they can meet and talk with new people thus make their loneliness go away. Furthermore, adults will come out and do the exercises like running, jogging and swimming if their family members have joined them. For an example, my father always join me when I do my exercises daily and even he asked mom to join with us.
In conclusion, it is not a rocket science that doing is better than the watching and I believe that spending time with people make physical activities more effective. It also enhance adults physical and mental health and will route to long life ahead
Comments
It is a known fact that
It is a known fact that people thesedays do not pay much attention to physical workouts. A part of society believes that broadcasting sport events on digital media would encourage adults to exercise more and live a healthy life. However, believe that other methods like dietary modifications can be employed to improve the health of inhabitants.
To begin with, sports can play a marvellous effect on the health of a person.By showing sport programmes and olympics a message can be conveyed to the viewers regarding the importance of exercise in leading a healthy life.
Players exercise regularly to remain fit and free of diseases. By frequent workouts one burns excessive calories and hence, decreases the incidence of contracting certain ailments like Heart Attack and Blood Pressure. A study which was conducted in London demonstrated that people who led sedentary life style were more involved in diseases. Therefore, the essence of exercise can be understood
Although physical workouts is one of the way to remain healthy, certain other ways also exist.
By altering the eating habits, one can remain fit.
Though fast food is delicious, it is full of fats. Therefore, it increases the probability of catching a disease. So, it is one's favour to avoid junk food. An article published in a famous newspaper read that unhealty eating habits decreases the likelihood of preventing health disorders.
In conclusion, it is certain that no doubt exercise is an effective way to promote health, altering food intake is also essential.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'enhances'?
Suggestion: enhances
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, as for, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1383.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76896551724 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29570503187 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579310344828 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.1328622026 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267446309831 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982483932972 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670893452903 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159873527325 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730152882898 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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