The government’s investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. TO what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often argued that investment in some fields of art ought to be waived to finance more crucial aspects, such as public services. While I accept the idea that people's everyday basic needs are of utmost importance. I agree that funding spiritual fields shouldn't be underestimated by authorities.
On the one hand, financial resources should be allocated in order for public facilities get improved. As it is the fundamental role of the government to enhance people's daily lives, there ought to be a non-stoppable strategy in order to upgrade primary services such as education, healthcare, transportation, and the like. Fifty years ago, the Malaysian government applied several tactics targeting the development of public services, especially education; as a result, Malaysia now is one of the greatest economies in the whole world. This would not have been possible without prioritizing the elevation of public services levels.
On the other hand, I am convinced that art is an international language which doesn't need a translation; therefore, it is through art people of different nations can communicate feasibly. Such privilege may promote peace and decrease conflictions among nations. To exemplify, during one of the art contests, which hosts talents from multiple destinations, an artist managed to raise the awareness to war victims via drawing on sand, after which plenty of organizations had established in many countries calling for peace and funding those victims. That is to say, important causes could be put in the spot of light if art was allowed to speak out; thus, it's recommended to pour money to fund artistic fields.
To conclude, despite the paramount necessity of focusing on improving all public services, I reiterate that governments should place all art branches on their priority list.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: recommended pouring
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, such as, as a result, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32986111111 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02668653883 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.652777777778 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.5495072707 49.4020404114 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.916666667 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143328931731 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479390252911 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332996770058 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842008633356 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341044974323 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.