The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
it is clear that the progressing rate of the population having overweight has become a concern for the health care facilities. A section of society believes in providing physical education as a school subject so people are aware of fitness and health issues are alleviated, helping the health care sector. I agree with this statement to a large extent and opine that introducing this subject, the children will grow up to be health-conscious citizens and due to fewer people falling ill will eventually aid the health sector.
There are reasons for thinking that physical education subject if taught in a school can help to lower the stress of the health care sector. The primary reason is obvious that fewer people would fall ill, reducing the number of people rushing to the hospital due to poor diet and an unhealthy lifestyle. Unequivocally, the physical education subject emphasizes on the healthy diet, games, and sports as well as the importance of maintaining physical health. As a result, pupils learning the subject would have healthy habits and would not fall sick soon, relieving the health authorities. For example, fewer people would consume junk food and diseases like obesity would decrease dramatically from society.
Another reason for studying physical education at school is the way it helps to learn games and sports. The overweight problem is due to the lazy habits of not exercising on a daily basis. As the student learns the outdoor sport, he would take part in games instead of being a couch potato. Consequently, he would keep himself fit and would have fewer hospital visits.
In conclusion, I pen down saying that including more lessons on physical education can certainly lower the stress of the health care sector as people will tend to stay fit due to health awareness learned at school. As a result, health issues related to overweight would drop considerably and finances would be less used towards curing weight-related ailments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14860681115 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73166089842 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532507739938 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9521106958 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.785714286 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64285714286 7.06120827912 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287268806765 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101072541085 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701402470568 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182765948623 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0857653163331 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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