It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media.
What do you think is the reason for the growth in the rate of juvenile crime?
What solution can you offer to deal with this situation?
Most of the times it is considered that the rising of teenager crimes is related to the media. I like to mention that I completely argue that the mass media focus on violent and sensational crimes and crime is one of the main subjects of most news programs. So we need to discuss the reasons and the effect of media on increasing the juvenile adequacies then the ways to prevent and solve this situation.
Media increase the crime because of two main reasons. Firstly, teenager tends to have role models. So if their favorite role model involves in gangs or was criminal, they would have been negatively influenced by them and consequently might commit a crime. Secondly, media is one of the most important parts of our life and we spend most of the time with the media. If the media's content was violence, it would be affected our behavior and we would become depressed or disappointed and as a result of that we might encourage to commit crime to make our feeling better.
The solutions to resolve the massive increase of juvenile adequacies is to enforce observation on the children and pay attention to age limitations. Children should use the media under their parent's observation and they have to be allowed to watch some kind of films for instance. Furthermore, parents should pay attention to age limitation of some kind of movies or generally using the media.
In conclusion, most of the time people believe that violence in the media is an acceptable reason for rising of teenager crimes. In fact several reasons are known nowadays, and media is one of the most discussable ones. We debate the effects and the ways to avoid the raise of the crimes above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'committing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: committing
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'furthermore', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'for instance', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'kind of', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.262820512821 0.247107183377 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.153846153846 0.155533422707 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0641025641026 0.0946595960268 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0352564102564 0.0501214627716 70% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0544871794872 0.0437548338989 125% => OK
Prepositions: 0.128205128205 0.122226691241 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0320512820513 0.0403226058552 79% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60962570378 2.80594681477 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0448717948718 0.0326793684256 137% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.105769230769 0.0861772015684 123% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0224358974359 0.021408717616 105% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.011925033212 0% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1672.0 1933.35771543 86% => OK
No of words: 291.0 316.048096192 92% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74570446735 6.12580529183 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20517956788 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.319587628866 0.374742101984 85% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.243986254296 0.28420135186 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.168384879725 0.203846283523 83% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.109965635739 0.137316102897 80% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60962570378 2.80594681477 93% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.037074148 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505154639175 0.56093040696 90% => OK
Word variations: 49.9158072629 60.7387585426 82% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0891783567 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.7857142857 20.7743622355 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5522487955 49.517814964 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.428571429 127.492653851 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7857142857 20.7743622355 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.814263465372 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 45.1843397153 49.1944974215 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.73684210526 1.69124875643 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.487461801859 0.332605444948 147% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.155832007337 0.102741220458 152% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0940626363225 0.0668466124924 141% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.623721532049 0.534860350844 117% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.161879250573 0.148594505496 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.238032193744 0.134430193775 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10689016575 0.0742795772207 144% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.399142842596 0.324371583561 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0610275961006 0.0638462369009 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.367927212096 0.228012699653 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653099834684 0.058150111329 112% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.68436873747 35% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 5.90881763527 51% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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