Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example for young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Our today’s public figures are rather well-known for their wealth and their extravagant lifestyle. Today's media, either intentionally or unintentionally, ignoring people’s remarkable achievement and, instead, is broadcasting some others’ lifestyle as the most praised one. In my point of view, our young generation, constantly under media's influence, is susceptible to set them as their role model, regardless of their suitability.
Nowadays, media is shaping our mind; the things we either approve or reject, the things we want or dismiss, and more importantly, it is forming our longs. Celebrities’ life and all their surroundings, including their hobbies and the fancy product they consume, is being published and advertised by media and, consequently, is being absorbed by the young. Therefore, we are feeding our young generation with some inappropriate worthless patterns which must be reconsidered as these young adults’ though, beliefs and priorities will form our societies' future. Today, particularly with the social media being around, we have celebrities who are publicly praised for their charming appearance or their wealth or their unusually luxury way of life. Our young generation deeply long to have some resemblance to these people, some may even fake it.
As much as the human being naturally seek someone greater than himself to admire or worship, we should vigilantly consider who the trending celebrities are. Because every one of them has their own life story, their achievement, and their failures. Society and the most susceptible group, the young, will receive messages from celebrities’ life. An Olympic gold medal-winner, as an example, is far better suited to be admired rather than a fashion model as it would encourage endeavor, hardworking and being result-oriented. The message that is breached into our young generation should be slightly controlled so they would set a more sophisticated figure as his or her role model.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, may, so, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 18.0 41.998997996 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58609271523 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23469260697 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615894039735 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6103805652 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.769230769 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2307692308 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.23076923077 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200604303074 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804810355173 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681875559515 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143848754335 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220013142126 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.95 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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