Nowadays the crime rate among young people is increasing. Why do you think this is happening? What can be done by parents and teachers to reduce it?
For the past decade, the juvenile delinquency has been rising. Contemporary youth causes much more harm to society than previous generations. There are lots of problems which cause this problem and most of them is connected to the modern people’s values and way of life.
To begin with, many years ago children were the purpose of our life. Youth of that time, after university’s completion, created their own families and payed a lot of attention to their kids’ growing. Parents have been guiding their kids for 24 hours per day. Young charges were always busy with studying and sport classes. They didn’t have much time to play with their buddies and thus, they didn’t pick up the bad habits from “street guys”.
Nowadays, the way of rearing the kids have significantly changed. Contemporary parents tend to earn more money, to get a promotion on job or increase a social status. They don’t have a time to control children. Thus, they so caught up with work and kids have a lot of free time. They don’t get enough attention from parents and do whatever they want. Sorry to say, the possibility of choosing criminal way of life in young age is very high. As parents don’t guide children, they inclined to try their first crimes.
The second and very important reason is the economic instability in countries of the third world. There are too many countries, which have wallowed in poverty and can’t afford to pay decent wages to the population. Therefore, miserable families have problems with money and can’t bay enough food or clothing for themselves. Moreover, teenagers are very sensible. They want to be not only fed and dressed, but have an expensive items of electronic such as, smartphones, PC tablets and list goes on and on. This infinite lust for luxuries leads young people to commit crimes in order to buy what they want.
There are few feasible ways to stop increasing of the crime rate. Firstly, government need to make a punishment for juvenile delinquency more severe. Children ought to be afraid of crimes’ commitment. Secondly, parents should pay more attention for child’s growing, create a day schedule for them and don’t let them to be involved in friendship with suspicious children.
In conclusion, the level of crimes committed by young people is growing due contemporary way of our life. In some poor countries, such crimes are caused by families’ misery and poverty. To address this problem, governments should allow people the better way of life and parents should treat their children right.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: item
... fed and dressed, but have an expensive items of electronic such as, smartphones, PC ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ents should treat their children right.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'thus', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.248598130841 0.247107183377 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.175700934579 0.155533422707 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0878504672897 0.0946595960268 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0355140186916 0.0501214627716 71% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0411214953271 0.0437548338989 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0915887850467 0.122226691241 75% => OK
Participles: 0.0336448598131 0.0403226058552 83% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82304982361 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0373831775701 0.0326793684256 114% => OK
Particles: 0.00373831775701 0.00163938923432 228% => OK
Determiners: 0.0523364485981 0.0861772015684 61% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.011214953271 0.021408717616 52% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00747663551402 0.011925033212 63% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2608.0 1933.35771543 135% => OK
No of words: 426.0 316.048096192 135% => OK
Chars per words: 6.1220657277 6.12580529183 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.20517956788 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.342723004695 0.374742101984 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.269953051643 0.28420135186 95% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.213615023474 0.203846283523 105% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.138497652582 0.137316102897 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82304982361 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 176.037074148 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56338028169 0.56093040696 100% => OK
Word variations: 66.8647912657 60.7387585426 110% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 16.0891783567 174% => OK
Sentence length: 15.2142857143 20.7743622355 73% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6790827109 49.517814964 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1428571429 127.492653851 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2142857143 20.7743622355 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.814263465372 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38877755511 137% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 42.2095908786 49.1944974215 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.48148148148 1.69124875643 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235572300537 0.332605444948 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0632823592648 0.102741220458 62% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0643354758487 0.0668466124924 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.448023870622 0.534860350844 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130969315991 0.148594505496 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769068313251 0.134430193775 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449871144745 0.0742795772207 61% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.31587025111 0.324371583561 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0851037667486 0.0638462369009 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151087096404 0.228012699653 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392120430459 0.058150111329 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.41683366733 205% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 5.90881763527 135% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 2.5751503006 349% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 1.9629258517 204% => OK
Total topic words: 21.0 10.4468937876 201% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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