In the past, sports champions used to be motivated by the desire to win a match or to break the world records. These days, they are more likely to be motivated by prize money and the opportunity to be famous. What message does this send to young people and how does this attitude to sport affect the sports themselves?
In the era of globalization, whether having the motivation to win and break world records or dreaming for prize currency and being celebrities to become champions in sports competitions has been a hotly-debatable issue in many parts of the world. While many people believe that win-awards to the results has no negative impacts on champions, I maintain that it can contribute to some downsides to people in several ways. The following paragraphs shall outline the main supporting points for my perspective.
In terms of the messages of this issue are sent to young people, firstly, it illustrates the negative trend in the attitude of many young people by pointing out the misleading of the main goal whenever taking part in any competition. In the past, people thought that only becoming a winner and breaking world records could worth the effort, if not, they were willing to pay a greater deal of effort until achieving this aim. Nevertheless, the youngster in contemporary society, they always express a desire to get more prize money and broaden their images through sports competitions. They seem there is no need to outperform their rivals because money and reputation are the only two things they dream to.
Turning to the consequences which can stem from this misleading to young people, it is noticeable that it can lead to the decline in the effort, as well as furthering their career paths related to sports. For example, if competitors can achieve the expected amount of money, they will give up this competition and feel satisfied with this award. In addition, people have no motivation to enhance the level of knowledge and expertise in sports skills and cannot become the best version of themselves. They can avoid falling behind each other unless they are industrious and never fed up with obstacles.
To sum up, the lack of knowledge about the true purpose of rivalry can result in consecutive failures throughout one’s life. I suggest that the government should place more importance on people’s attitudes than on the award-winning.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, so, well, while, for example, in addition, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0796460177 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84503143118 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598820058997 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.3901794526 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.461538462 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.92307692308 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258117848401 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769910568065 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638836383445 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134270296533 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691119624962 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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