People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

People live longer today and so people should stay in the workforce longer.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's generation, it is the fact that people live more than expected earlier, this is due to the medical services available now. Some people think that as the life span of human beings has increased, the age of retirement must also be increased, while others claim that retirement age must not be increased because of many facts. This essay will discuss the reasons why retirement age must not be increased and provides some good examples.

Firstly, A man spends lots of time in their work place during their middle age and will be dreaming to enjoy their old age after retirement. Secondly, At their adult age their body may not support to work and meanwhile the productivity also decreases. For example an older employee may need more leaves when compared to younger ones because of their health problems. Moreover the employer also needs to pay more salaries to them as they are senior employees. For instance, instead of paying one lakh rupees for one senior employee, an employer can appoint two young people by just paying twenty-five thousand each.

Another reason is that increasing the retirement age may result in severe unemployment problem in that country. As there are more talented youth available, older people can be replaced with new youngsters, that too with less salaries. In addition, humans at adult age will not be able to adopt new technologies which are quite important for the success of a company. If a company's employees don't get updated with the latest technology, then that firm may not get new projects and even there is a possibility of loosing existing clients.

To conclude, As there are many reasons why the retention period must not be increased, I strongly disagree with the statement

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Moreover,
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Suggestion:
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Suggestion: fewer
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Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, for instance, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1443.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 291.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9587628866 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58864864012 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580756013746 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.0648024418 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 111.0 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3846153846 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76923076923 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0584933940692 0.244688304435 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0228392566359 0.084324248473 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365195448812 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0375678781859 0.151304729494 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0218451942119 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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