At the present time the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults compared with the number of older people Do you think that the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

The fact that an increasing number of younger adults are relatively large compared to the quantity of the elderly is observed in many countries, which can have both negative and positive side effects. Personally, I assume that advantages that these countries derive from can outweigh the disadvantages
One obvious demerit of the climb in the young population is that it can make the unemployed number rise. Due to the modest quantity of senior citizens, the lack of well-experienced and highly qualified instructors occurs, which reduces the number of skillful candidates and makes companies find it difficult to employ. Another drawback is associated with crime-related problems. The younger criminals account for a high percentage for the reason: they are well-informed and good at various skills, especially technology, so they can exploit their knowledge to commit crime. For instance, this will encourage them to be associated with cybercrimes and hack important accounts on social networks with the purpose of fraud.
On the other hand, countries also derive a great deal of benefits from youngsters. Firstly, a rising number of young adults can contributes significantly to the economic development. Younger workforce who are obviously seen to be more energetic and innovative than the older population can work effectively and productively, therefore, bring high yield. besides, they are in charge of taking care of children and elderly, who are social burden because of their working inability. The second merit is that younger people can help to enhance the cultural diversity of countries. Because this generation easily adopts new things and has an opener mind than the older citizens. For example, in my country, Rap, which is a musical form using words without tune, is easily accepted by the youngsters, while the elderly almost reject it when they first listen.
In conclusion, while the overshadowing of the younger population can lead to the unemployment and crime issues, it has more favorable impacts on the national economy and culture.

Votes
Average: 8.7 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38390092879 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93947808222 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603715170279 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7593863844 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.214285714 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0714285714 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.64285714286 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204161727559 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645896281311 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576323339007 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116381397876 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651937625834 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.11 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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