Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Money and poverty go hand in hand. That means when money increases, the level of poverty tends to decrease. However, lending money is not the only solution in order to mitigate penury of any country, instead of we must focus on some different factores. I tend to agree with the proposal that there are some important methods which can be provided by the affluent country to developing country in order to diminish poverty.

First and foremost, creating job opportunities can reduce the level of poverty. In other words, as poverty is a obiquitous problem, if rich country can provide enough job oppertunities towards the poor country, this mammoth can be solved. For instance, many people from India pursue their jobs in Middle East countries, such as Dubai and they are eaning good amount of money to help their families and communities to fight with the poverty. Thus, developed nations, such as USA, England, should provide job opportunities to mitigate the penury.

Secondly, in order to sustain people need food and water along with good medicines. While, madecines can help to fight with many health hassles, food and water can help to maintain physical balance. For example, India helps Sri Lanka with AIDS medicines and daily groceries in order to bring them out from poverty. Thus, other than money there are many ways, which can help a country to fight with poverty.

Finally, there are may aspects of a nation which is as important as penury. These are education, health and defence system. So if a poor nation get monetary help from developed nation, it has to invest the amount in different aspects of that nation. I would like to cite an example. India often help Bangladesh with a good amount of money every financial year and Bangladesh invest this amount in different modes such as building new public hospitals along with improving there defece system. Therefore, other than poverty there are many fields which need to be improved.

To conclude, I would like to reiterate my opinion by saying that although money is the driving factor of a nation, rich nations can help poor nations with job opportunities and food.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, such as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96111111111 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47739782837 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497222222222 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.350935986 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9473684211 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21052631579 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194426550388 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595750433298 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602448447384 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109185216742 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280042732862 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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