Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that school’s curriculum should affiliate with the learning skills rather than traditional subjects because students can use them on future career. To a certain extent, I agree with the idea that the school should teach them only required job skills. However, I also think that they need to acknowledge traditional subjects such as history.
Excluding the traditional subjects such as history from education can be both extinctive and threat for obsolete cultures of a nation. This could deter young learners in schools from studying about their traditions and histories of a society. Hence, they will have a fewer knowledge about their cultures which is a threat of disappearing their traditions and tending to adapt other cultures as well as forget their social identity. A recent BBC documentary shows that In Africa, 20% of community traditions are in extinction due to lack of practicing their history. Therefore, enjoying history in education is another way to keep our customs.
However, I would argue that learning professional skills in a school can more useful than traditional subjects for a society. Achieving the skills such as computer helps students to get a better job after completion of their courses. Nowadays, employers are looking for not only educational degree but also related skills at recruiting time. For Example, most companies generate their office records in computers. If a production officer in a factory wants to record his daily fabrication reports, definitely he has to skillful in a computer. Therefore, teaching related job skills in educational institution enhance the ability of students to succeed in a job competition market.
In conclusion, It seems to me that educational curriculum should be based on profession oriented rather than spending time on conventional subjects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'less knowledge'?
Suggestion: less knowledge
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore, well, as for, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1552.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38888888889 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95947421924 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586805555556 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.8606905662 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.466666667 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315335404483 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0963132990417 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675018250525 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18299963655 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843160075 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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