Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive and sophisticated world where we live,humanbeings have been looking for best ways for proper children nurturing.Many individuals believe,it is an appropriate way to offering school age children money for each grade they get in school. However,some other have an opposite point of view.In my vantge point it is not proper to offer little students money as present for high marks they get in school.In what follows,i will elaborate on my vantage point.
Firstly,it is significant to be mentioned that,school age children are not matured enough to manage their money recieving as a gift for their good performance at school.To be more specific,little students do not have enough knowledge and experience to control and manage their money and do not waste it on buying unnecessary stuff.In addition, they are not mture enough to recognise good and bad ways of spending money,so offering them money for their high grades in school,pave a way for them to waste their oney and may be an incorrect way leading to have consequences.For instance,my father used to give me money for my high grades when i was 9 years old.i wasted my money on buying playstations,and playing with them entire the week.As a result ,i could ot concentrate on studies, and lost the grades.If my father had not gave me money as a gift, i would have passed my other lessons.
Another reason which deserves some attention here is that,suggesting money as a present for young students,negatively affects students behavior and influences their future.offering money for school age children for thier high marks,makes them less enthusiastic about learning lessons, and thier only motivation is money and receiving money causing aberrant behavior not only at this age but also in thier future career.To put it in other words, students should study their lessons and achieve high grades in order to consolidate their knowledge and enhance their educational performacne, not because of receiving money from their parents.
Form what has been discussed above, we may reach the conclusion that, parents should not offer money to school age children for their high grades. Since, lack of ability to manage the money in children leads to wasting the money. Besides, it will ruin their behaviour.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, so, thus, for instance, in addition, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 24.0651302605 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21195652174 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03879686544 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527173913043 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 581.4 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 20.2975951904 256% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 294.189304596 49.4020404114 596% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 274.0 106.682146367 257% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.5714285714 20.7667163134 253% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.7142857143 7.06120827912 251% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 35.0 5.01903807615 697% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.393831574289 0.244688304435 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.188839168905 0.084324248473 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874954104295 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257547411551 0.151304729494 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0205606221617 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.4 13.0946893788 225% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 18.7 50.2224549098 37% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.6 11.3001002004 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.83 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.8 10.1190380762 225% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 24.0 10.7795591182 223% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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