Some people feel that entertainers ( eg. Film stars , pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money.Do you agree or disagree?Which other types of job should be highly paid

In a recent century, media play a prominent role in forming attitudes and events. Hence, the attention to this phenomenon has increased through years, which results in dramatically growing of celebrities incomes. besides this trend is against social justice, some other jobs are neglected regardless to their lucrative effects on whole society.
For one, although entertainers help people to forget about their daily tensions for some hours, their incomes compare to their productivity for society is a great deal more than other sectors of society. For instance, some footballers in Iran are annually paid even more than sum of 10 years income of a teacher. However, the profound effect of a teacher on the students through 10 years teaching is undoubtedly deniable and more effective than a footballer through one year. As this example shows, when it comes to compare, it is obvious how celebrities are paid high amount of money.
In addition to this, some categories of jobs are lucrative for not only current tax givers but also their next generation, which are neglected, and should be paid highly. Take researchers in health sciences as an example. Providing life without monetary crisis would lead them to concentrate more on discovering new methods of cure for diseases, which could be fruitful for humankind. Thus, it is obvious financial support of this people is an investigation for all society.
All to all, it is a fact that in both developed and developing countries celebrities are paid far more than their contribution to society compared to other occupations. It is hoped that this trend will be changed into the foreseeable future.

Votes
Average: 7.4 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, thus, for instance, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1311.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16141732283 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82753098831 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594488188976 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 403.2 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2377043486 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.846153846 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07692307692 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137008138267 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478167062284 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037608995682 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0831643049171 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0169087905232 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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