Employed in a job with decent salary is satisfying; whereas, being paid with unsatisfied wage is discouraging. When compared with a film star, some people think entertainers are over paid because a film star earns more than a million dollars a year. Personally, I disagree with this view, I believe entertainers are fairly paid in accordance with their popularity and professional skill.
To start with, film stars are paid according to popularity. The more popular the star is, the higher he will be paid. A well-known singer earns immense fortune; while, an ordinary singer with little fame has to work in other occupation to support his career. In addition, normal people do not wield pervasive influence as a famous celebrity. Therefore, enterprises pay enormous money to hire celebrities for advertisements. Entertainers earn fortune from popularity, which is the trait that normal people do not posess; thus, they are not over paid for nothing.
Moreover, entertainment is a professional job. People are required to acquire particular skills to perform entertaining. Film stars are opt in acting; musicians are good at composing, singing and porforming. Thus, without professional knowledge in those field, people cannot commence the entertainment. Generally, professional works are paid higher than non professional job. For instance, engineers, doctors and lawyers are paid more than occupation like waiter and salesman. Therefore, people work in entertainment industry enjoy a better wage than employee in no profession field.
In conclusion, entertainer are generally paid higher than average people because of popularity and professional work. Entertainers are fairly paid in entertainment industry, just as other employees in different industries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
Employed in a job with decent salary is satisfying; whereas, being paid with unsatisfied w...
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Line 3, column 325, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrity'.
Suggestion: celebrity
...e do not wield pervasive influence as a famous celebrity. Therefore, enterprises pay enormous mo...
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Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'opted'.
Suggestion: opted
...to perform entertaining. Film stars are opt in acting; musicians are good at compos...
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Line 7, column 147, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ional work. Entertainers are fairly paid in entertainment industry, just as other...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.65037593985 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19159647961 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593984962406 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.7788502589 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.5 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7777777778 20.7667163134 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283995423172 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937432662952 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488079385695 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183738719281 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229503128972 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.9 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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