Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.Discuss both these views and give yo

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Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Health is considered as an uttermost important aspect of people all around the world, regardless of their wealth, sex, country and so on. Every day people spend lots of money endeavoring to regain their lost health in hospitals & clinics. While Some people think spending governmental budget on establishing different sports facilities will mostly improve public health, others state that different measures should be considered as well.

Nowadays, not only people suffer from sedentary lifestyle without any physical activity, but also use many unhealthy junk foods because of lack of time in their lives. Having eaten so many unhealthy junk foods, People will suffer from different diseases like blood pressure, high cholesterol & triglyceride, diabetes & depression. Hence, government should spend a lot on providing free of charge medical insurances for citizens. Whereas, with much less spending on establishing different sports facilities & clubs, not only they could make people immune to common diseases proceeding sedentary lifestyle, but also improve their mental health and save more of country’s budget for other uses.

However, concentrating on sports centers have its own critics too. Many struggle that it is only one solution from hundreds of ways to strengthen public health. For instance, Bans on smoking in public places and increased taxes on tobacco products help curb smoking. Moreover, another strategy to improve public health includes placing supermarkets closer to people's homes, designing walkable neighborhoods and providing easier access to recreational areas from homes, schools and businesses, cause less polluted air, which is the main result of many diseases in modern countries.

To conclude, people may have different thoughts about how to increase public health. Some of them insist on increasing the number of sports facilities is the best way but others do not agree with them. In my opinion, although sport is an important task for human health, solely it is not enough for improvement.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 68, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun struggle seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many struggles'.
Suggestion: Many struggles
...ports centers have its own critics too. Many struggle that it is only one solution from hundr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, well, whereas, while, for instance, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58899676375 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77374443632 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.640776699029 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.4198995172 49.4020404114 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.357142857 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265548291072 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959219684086 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621987056886 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175767672456 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652662780556 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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