Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sport facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
People have different views about the improvements of health in society by providing more sport facilities for the residents of metropolitan cities. While a group of people assert that this would not be effective, I would argue that not only increasing the number of sport facilities but also the public awareness and educating people would be beneficial for individuals.
There are a variety of reasons why I would argue that providing sporting facilities such as gyms, swimming pools and the like is not enough for increasing the public health. Firstly, governments should make awareness among people about the detrimental effects of sedentary life style and the consequences it would have on the families in the future. Secondly, they should educate children at school and add some sport courses to their curriculum which would be indispensable for their health. A salient example of this is USA that could boost children’s efficiency in the academic courses almost 60% by adding physical activities to their timetable. Finally, world health organization can broadcast some TV or Radio programs to inform people about their health condition and the popular ailments that are results of physical activities.
On the other hand, raising the number of sport facilities in societies would motivate more people to use them and the public health would impressed by this measure. Furthermore, by running sport centers in different neighborhoods families have the chance to take part in the centers with all the family members which would be fun, exciting and amusing. To support my claim I can refer to an article having been published in Times magazine, indicates that children of families who attend some sporting centers are more likely to follow a sport field in the future.
In conclusion, although providing sport centers and recreational facilities for the residents of mega cities would be beneficial, it would not motivate people to attend the sport classes without making awareness about health scheme in society. I believe that this is an important issue and governments should try to inform people about the consequences of lack of physical activities in their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'impress'
Suggestion: impress
...to use them and the public health would impressed by this measure. Furthermore, by runnin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 348.0 315.596192385 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29885057471 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81045060093 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497126436782 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.5789902915 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 153.666666667 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273169102664 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115221136396 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066647843234 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187273591982 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471278390262 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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