Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Ensuring adequate food for the entire population has been a major concern for nations throughout the centuries. Some people believe that government should focus on producing all kinds of food while importing as less as possible to ensure buying capabilities of all citizens. I firmly believe that producing many kinds of food is an inevitable effort in terms of ensuring nation’s food security.
Firstly, the more a country relies on imported food, the more food crisis it faces. Food import includes transportation costs, taxation and other charges that eventually increase the food price. To tackle this problem, a government should allocate more budgets to improve national production by maximizing the collaboration of university and research laboratory. Consequently, this idea can create more talented individuals who would be involved in domestic food production. Furthermore, by mass production of all kinds of food items, a country can prepare for the rainy days.
Secondly, by focusing on farming, irrigation and planting, a government can decrease unemployment problems. For example, in Indonesia, farming sector creates the highest percentage of jobs. More than 50 percent Indonesian are directly or indirectly depends on the agriculture sector.
Finally, imported food does not have the quality and freshness that locally produced one can offer. If food is imported from a long distance, the food value degrades and in some cases, toxic chemicals are used to preserve the food. Thus the local production of foods would ensure better food quality and sound health of citizens.
In conclusion, preventing the food crisis, ensuring better food quality and decreasing unemployment issues could implement if a country becomes self-sufficient on their food production. Massively producing all kind of foods is a great effort which government could decide and take advantages of.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 24.0651302605 37% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.6124567474 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98554765658 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598615916955 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.2477963914 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 101.375 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0625 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8125 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333534994897 0.244688304435 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121219314976 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074667858082 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189807568351 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0905323189784 0.056905535591 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.96 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.72 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.