Some people think that the government should give money to creative people, such as artists and musicians. To what extent do you agree?
Artists and musicians are the most creative persons of the society and considered as the lifeline to the public that makes the life more colorful and cheerful. However, some masses ponder that funding is essential to these areas of community. I fully agree with the notion, as it helps them to grow and succeed in their carrier pathway.
There are multifarious points to endorse the viewpoints. First and foremost, preservation of the history by encouraging these arts. To be specific, fewer folks devoted their life towards art and music and preserve the glory of the history. If government give enough capital to these creative persons, then their self confidence boosts up and this also encourage them to stick this work and help to preserve this art by changing the mind set of others. For instance, Spanish government encourage local artists and musicians by celebrating annual feats that promote and protect these creativities among youngsters. Moreover, persons who opt to this carrier makes his living standard better. As they get sufficient money from authorities for their work and fulfill their all dreams. Consequently, art and music artists are respected and valued in the society.
Further emphasizing, art and music becomes the first preference for new generation. To illustrate, money allured youngsters and when governing bodies provide handsome wages as well as good carrier opportunities in relation to work as a artists or musicians then this is a perfect match. This step not only creates awareness to preserve art but also to plunge the unemployment rates by enhancing job vacancies.
To recapitulate, art and music is the heart of every society. Although, the government invested some chunk of money to not only surge the job ratio but also preserve these creativities for future generations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1537.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26369863014 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80792472563 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568493150685 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5167322503 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0625 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129094942905 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0386393071686 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413427259758 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0868652899578 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209562319858 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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