some people think that professionals, athletes make good role models for young people, while other believe that they do not.
Discuss work views and give your opinion
Due to the rampant contemporary era, everyone wants to become a legendary personality in the world. Due to this, some people assert that professionals such as CEO, bank managers and athletes are good role models for youngsters while others condemn about this statement.I agree with the former statement. I can portray both of the views along with my opinion in the subsequent segments.
As far as my views are concerned, there are innumerable reasons which are propitious with some people statement. Primarily, professionals puts a great example of themselves among the people and most of them are from small towns but rather than emphasise on lack of things,they worked hard then they are able to show the superiority among masses. Beacuse of this, some people deem that they are the role models for teenagers. Indeed, such examples give young ones the real spirit that they are also able to achieve the goal of their life and whatever the circumstances are there, they just focus on their goals not on the other trival things which are prevailing in all over the world than they definitely achieve success in their life.
In the paradoxical side, some people are resistant to the statement. First and foremost, sometimes when professional like actors for athletes are failed in their work then they are very depressed and go on the wrong way such as taking drug substance to relax their mind and after a passage of time they become addicted. Hence, people avoid these types of personalities so that they do not becomes havoc for their children future, if their children copy them.
However, I cogitate that professionals and athletes are the best examples for the young people. Youngsters can follow their path in which they can able to achieve success also learn many other things from them and which ruin their life so that's they ward off themselves from these types of mistakes.
To recapitulate, everyone has their own views, I do not deny any of them but I still reiteratesome people think that professionals, athletes make good role models for young people, while other believe that they do not.
Discuss work views and give your opinion my opinion that legendary personalities are the best role models for the young ones, people can unearth the reality about their success and learn from them and acquire their goals
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, still, then, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 24.0651302605 220% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 392.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98214285714 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56673603054 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489795918367 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 604.8 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.2689056866 49.4020404114 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.5 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416560927666 0.244688304435 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148524380224 0.084324248473 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125534766284 0.0667982634062 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239485865656 0.151304729494 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132921356855 0.056905535591 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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