Some people think that young people are influenced more by their friends than by their parents or teachers. Do you agree or disagree?
There are different opinions in regard to the question of whether who influences the youth. While some people believe that friends have the major impact, others think that older generation take the leading position in reference to this matter. Due to the fact that there are merits to both sides of the argument, I inclined to believe that the answer depends on specific circumstance.
From one point of view, it is a common knowledge that friends influence on teenagers more than anybody else in developed countries nowadays. To my knowledge, for instance, according to the latest studies which were published in the New York Times Magazine on 10 January, 2018, seventy five percent of youngsters that took part in magazine’s survey stated that in modern world they do not need to listen to their parents, as well as to follow their advice, and that is the main reason why they feel quite happy. Thus, this makes it clear what the youth of the Western countries consider as their masters.
In spite of this consideration, from another perspective, there is a view that adults like parents and tutors have the main impact on young generation during their upbringing. The most cogent reason of this is the fact that in developing countries, such as Russia, youngsters live with their parents, and, thus, tend to follow their advice. To my experience, for example, a friend of mine decided to choose his profession after his father’s advice and now he is a senior lawyer in a large legal company. If he had listened to his friends, and had chosen another job, not only would not he have obtained his current position, but he also would not have been happy, because he met his wife at work. Hence, it is clear that parents have the leading role in the upbringing young people in particular parts of the world.
In conclusion, my personal view is that the answer to the question over whether the adults have the major impact on young generation or their friends depends on the country where the youth live since there are strong grounds for subscribing to this view. It is presumed that in future this difference will disappear due to the fact that the Western world’s life standards are tend to spread all over the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whether; the question whether
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...n countries consider as their masters. In spite of this consideration, from ano...
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Suggestion: has
...osen another job, not only would not he have obtained his current position, but he a...
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Suggestion: tended
...Western world's life standards are tend to spread all over the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, thus, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, such as, as well as, in regard to, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 385.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82597402597 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56286650107 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537662337662 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.5278734927 49.4020404114 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.923076923 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6153846154 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9230769231 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21319335947 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729162289832 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531100945402 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117784398195 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.032569839903 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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