Some people think that young people should go to the university for further education, while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc.
Discuss both the views and give your opinion?
Deciding future aspects and choosing right direction at a right time has always been a challenging decision for youngsters. It is believed by some people that young brigade should not go ahead with tertiary education after attaining academic qualifications up to senior secondary or high school, instead they should start jobs which are ready to avail such as, a car mechanic or a builder. However, my views incline with the people who oppose this notion and I intend to discuss both perspectives along with my opinion in subsequent paragraphs.
On the one hand, one school of thought believes that doing job at early stage of life is an appropriate option for the young ones as it provides financial stability at yearly age. In fact, having a good amount of money makes youngsters independent as well as allowing them to give financial help to their loved ones . For instance, it can be big relief for such families who are being struggled to earn a bread each day, if their children start work as sooner as possible. In addition to it, practical exposure that someone can gain through work cannot be learned by reading books. Thus, opting a career sooner can be proven a good option.
On the other hand, I support the advocates who claim that pursing university education should be a right choice. This is because further studies would allow more time to a student to sharpen their skills and identify hidden talents. As a result, they can do excellence in a particular field. To quote an example, if a capable young one drop studies to be a car mechanic then he may lose a chance to be an automobile engineer in future, which he could have become if he had chosen to be study further. Besides this, white color jobs and reputed positions in public sector required a person to be well qualified and to acquire these positions university education plays an indispensable role. Moreover, career opportunities available after completing higher studies are not only respectful but also offer much more lucrative pay than jobs available after basic academic qualifications. Hence, higher studies lead a student towards the much more bright future.
In conclusion, although blue color jobs may help youngsters with financial gains at early age, yet university education is much more important in terms of acquiring esteemed jobs and chance to do best in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 398.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93969849246 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69166864953 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 176.041082164 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600502512563 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0575025194 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.875 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.6875 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21011725212 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058441156044 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601748930916 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113200775849 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800176982172 0.056905535591 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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