Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With advancement in the field of medicine, people tend to live longer than the average lifespan. Hence, some argue that the retirement age should be extended by couple of years. I support the idea that companies should retire individuals timely depending their health conditions.

Firstly, I believe, many people have long wish list in their life, which they have to carry out after they are freed themselves from their work life. many folks plan bucket list of to visit exotic places, which otherwise gets postponed because of hectic work life schedules. Do you know how many Americans go on vacations or avail annual leave, each year? As per recent statistic published by CNBC, only 4% of US working class plans to take annual leave. With less time away from desk can cause mental illness and prolonged procrastination of delaying their merriment.

Secondly, the ratio of working population in age group of 18-55 years has increased. To give employment to youth entering the job market, we need to create opportunities and these openings are limited. By not pushing these freshmen to illicit methods to earn means of living, it becomes pertinent for the older generation to create prospects for the younger generation to enter the work force. Although, this next generation are not experienced, they bring new zeal and ideas to change age-old process.

To conclude, I would like to emphasise that every old cohort needs to pave a way for newbies to succeed in the society. Without taking well-timed retreat, it is impossible for employed person to free himself and enjoy his life.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'wished'.
Suggestion: wished
...rstly, I believe, many people have long wish list in their life, which they have to ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
... freed themselves from their work life. many folks plan bucket list of to visit exot...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, second, secondly, so, well, as to, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1329.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05323193916 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58981978238 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.71102661597 0.561755894193 127% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.3671267059 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 94.9285714286 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7857142857 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203843830951 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602733595369 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545164850814 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104590567171 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860957607962 0.056905535591 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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