Some sports professionals receive a great deal. Some people think that it is unfair to someone from other important professions. Discuss both views?
It is true that sports players are paid much more than people from other vital fields. While some think that it is unreasonable, I agree with those who argue that these athletes deserve such high revenue.
On the one hand, there is a strong variety of resources to believe that it is unjustified to offer sportspeople high income. Perhaps, the major argument would that sports only serve recreational purposes, whereas people working in medical and educational fields make a greater contribution to society. This can be illustrated by teachers, who deliver valuable lessons that facilitate the development of academically and morally successful individuals. Likewise, doctors and numbers of people working related to the health care profession, after a harsh period of accumulating knowledge, devote their career to saving lives and detecting remedies for dangerous diseases. Without these occupations, the community would fail to thrive, which means that its citizens have to suffer an inferior standard of life.
On the other hand, I support the view that these athletes are entitled to receive high income. To begin with, the pursuit of sports field not only requires nonstop efforts and persistence but also complies with constant hard training. In addition, these athletes with shorter careers and living without their family, frequently tolerate and face the risk of injuries that threaten their enterprise. Furthermore, due to the fact that they are illustrious sports players, their victory in international competitions brings pride and honor to their country. Besides, they have to bear a furious mood of the community, if they create or be implicated in any little tiny scandals as well as fail to compete with other rivals.
To summarize, owing to the resources mentions above, although relying upon the view of some people that it is undeserved, if the athletes get a great income than some from other crucial occupation, it seems to me that I am in favor of those who debate that how much money these sportspeople receive, is worth to them.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, likewise, so, well, whereas, while, in addition, as well as, it is true, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1730.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22658610272 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78257410829 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61329305136 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9424083599 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.076923077 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9230769231 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186454336644 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574643307497 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619011435909 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124156612135 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0661720972331 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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