Some think that developing a successful career is more important than spending time with family and friends, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give our own opinion.
Nowadays work-life balance is a subject of a controversial issue, affect life of all people; while some highlight the importance of career progression in a person's life more than spending time with family, critics condemn this idea and believe that people should spend more time with their loved ones. In this essay, I will discuss viewpoints of both sides of the debate and express my perspective in the conclusion.
On the one hand, proponents of career success often mention the financial aspect of job achievement. By being a top-rated workforce in any field, one would have a choice to find a job at best companies, which offer high salary and package to their employees. This would enable the person to support his family financially or poor people, by donating to charities. Besides that, some people need challenges and hard-working in their life, since it is matched with their personality. There are a lot of people, who would get bored by family gathering or socializing with friend, while get excited by progression in their work, that gives them great satisfaction.
On the other hand, critics believe that focusing only on career, while neglecting family and friends, is not a healthy practice for one's life, especially in the long-term. Widespread stressed-related diseases or depression, especially in the developed countries, signals that people should have a more balanced lifestyle, by changing their habit and spending adequate amount of time with their family. Moreover, opponents argue that nothing, ranging from money or success, could replace a person role in his/her nuclear family. For instance, children, whom bring up without enough attention by their parents due to long-hours jobs, would suffer from a lot of problems in their adulthood.
In summary, while the role of professional success in one's life is undeniable, it is sensible to conclude that people should put aside materialistic consideration and not sacrifice their own and family's well-being, the most important priority in everyone's life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, moreover, so, well, while, for instance, in summary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2962962963 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8943443266 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595679012346 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.2200396443 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.0 106.682146367 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241855732012 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778879371494 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633125633702 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146011751782 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573580946741 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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