Since dawn of ancient Athens until today, physical activities played an important role in each society. Nowadays, many are adamant that should be taken into consideration in order to examine its constructive and destructive facets of this matter. Some people may hold the view that the sports games are vital for increasing student’s success. However, others take an opposite view and consider that they should study academic studies since they will help them in their future. From my vantage point, I concur with the former group and the lines will shed on light my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to mention to say is that the importance of learning effect. There are many study which shows that physical activities increase knowledge and help to student for better motivation. According to the a noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistics reveal by a recent research, at MIT University in the USA shows that kids who played soccer are tend to get higher score at exams compared to the others. Due to high motivation, the research study shows that the students do exercises which help to think clearly before all exams.
Secondly, in approaching this issue, apart from what mentioned above, there is another subtle point. Some sports activities such as soccer, volleyball, and basketball boost some abilities such as group thinking and working. These abilities is significant for students who will work at big companies such as Wall Mark, McDonalds and etc. Some companies, especially work with overseas countries, are looking for organizational abilities. Consequently, sports games in the schools might help student’s carriers.
To wrap up, the once conclude that physical exercises are not only important for health but also carrier. I think schools should increase the time of these activities in all schools even in universities. They are helpful for us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 80, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to effect'
Suggestion: to effect
... say is that the importance of learning effect. There are many study which shows that ...
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Line 4, column 98, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun study seems to be countable; consider using: 'many studies'.
Suggestion: many studies
...mportance of learning effect. There are many study which shows that physical activities in...
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Line 4, column 222, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'a' is left.
Suggestion: the; a
...nt for better motivation. According to the a noteworthy refreshingly intelligible st...
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Line 4, column 372, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...A shows that kids who played soccer are tend to get higher score at exams compared t...
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Line 6, column 241, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...p thinking and working. These abilities is significant for students who will work ...
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Line 6, column 329, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... companies such as Wall Mark, McDonalds and etc. Some companies, especially work with ov...
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Line 8, column 138, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...carrier. I think schools should increase the time of these activities in all scho...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, apart from, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1597.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34113712375 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81495303373 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4384847237 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9411764706 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5882352941 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16619194653 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498459286307 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395455610125 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0990542791335 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247228330035 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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