big city
Big cities are often the location for large factories. It’s logical to build them there because a high population density allows companies to find more workers. Urban areas are also close to transportation and shipping routes, so it’s easy to understand why many factories want to operate there. However, if I could choose to stop a new factory from opening in my neighborhood, I would absolutely oppose it.
The first reason that another factory should not be built in Istanbul is because it is dangerous. There has been a lot of fast, unregulated development in the last decade. As a result, many apartments are very close to each other. Often, there physically is no space for anything new. A recent newspaper article said that if there was an earthquake in Istanbul, emergency services could not organize to help people. This is because there is no open space where people can meet. Although many companies might argue that jobs justify opening a factory, those jobs should not endanger citizens who live near there. It’s very important for companies to carefully choose the locations of factories so that people are always safe.
The other obvious concern is a factory’s impact on quality of life. Factories are generally not quiet places. They create waste, dust, and gases that can cause illnesses for local residents. Also, the heavy machinery can generate a lot of noise pollution. Unfortunately here in Istanbul, there aren’t many parks. Children get tired of being at home and they need somewhere to go and play. Naturally, they go to the streets. Children deserve clean, safe places to play, but if they are forced to play next to a factory, then they don’t have a nice or relaxing environment. It’s true that there is now more and more technology that allows kids to play inside (with tablets or laptops), but they need an outdoor space so they can connect with nature. In fact, adults also need this kind of connection and space to relax. When people spend more time in green areas, they are happier and less stressful.
Despite the fact that many companies say it’s practical and easier to build factories in cities, for the main reasons of improving safety and the environment where people live, more factories should not be built in Istanbul. (word count 383)
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to clean'
Suggestion: to clean
...hey go to the streets. Children deserve clean, safe places to play, but if they are f...
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Line 4, column 230, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Word
...tories should not be built in Istanbul. word count 383
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, in fact, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1929.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98449612403 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62350137213 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583979328165 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.8196612284 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.16 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.48 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0386434669685 0.236089414692 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0164145057981 0.076458572812 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804143271705 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0342284983904 0.150856017488 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059285498279 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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