A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (ages14-18) improve their teaching. It is considering two plans:
1. Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to teach effectively, and they will then come back to their schools and provide that training for other teachers in school.
2. Provide additional training in teaching effectively for high school teachers, using online material that each teacher will study individually.
The question is whether a city should provide a traditional way for training its high school teachers or a new approach such as using online materials. Everyone in consideration to his private view point can choose one of the mentioned methods; however, I am inclined to affirm that when a society can be prosperous that all of its sectors regulate their way in correspond with done changes of that community. I feel this way for some reasons, which I will explore them in following essay to empower my vantage point:
To begin with, nobody could overlook this fact that teachers play a crucial role in students ' life. Not only in teaching filed, but also they are responsible to assist students to improve their personality and also confront their private troubles through consultation or giving some piece of advice. Traditionally, the atmosphere of a class was rigid and tough; hence, a close relationship with the young was not priority of the teachers. One should not forget that studying in such a ambient provide a lethargy and numb feeling, so needless to say that an exhausted mind will not be able to concentrate on the class materials; as a result destructive consequence of this condition can be obvious; however, new teaching approaches are based on the newest ideas of psychology. Today's, psychologists offer that teachers should attempt to behave in a class based on students' spirit, interests. In fact, a friendly relationship is important as much as teaching.
The second reason for my argument lies the reality of technology. It is believed that technology has been keeping marching forward; therefore all parts and members of a society are doomed to follow its rules. Available online materials such as a variety of articles, the news published books, the best educational videos or audios or even educational tools can optimize the teachers' work. When a teacher makes effort to obtain such great data individually, definitely he can perceive all aspects of this required task compared with a teacher has participated in some training classes compulsory. Briefly, having a great curiosity can be more effective in this issue.
To sum up, this conclusion could be drawn that looking for online and up-dated approaches can causes teachers to broaden their view and knowledge base of teaching in confronting with their young students; subsequently, a powerful relationship will create among them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...teachers play a crucial role in students life. Not only in teaching filed, but al...
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Suggestion: an
...should not forget that studying in such a ambient provide a lethargy and numb fee...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, hence, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, i feel, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2029.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14974619289 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89751355252 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57614213198 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.0472449801 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.928571429 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1428571429 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197915527419 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654323398742 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461969513241 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118193063366 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254972732761 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.75 8.01818996416 122% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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