Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: the advice from the grandparents is of no use to their grandchildren because the world has changed a lot over the past 50 years.
Grandparents usually pass on words of wisdom to the younger generation. But it has been argued that people should no longer turn to the elderly for advice because the world is no longer the way it was fifty years ago. I think this claim is unconvincing and questionable for the following reasons.
First off, the world has not changed that much in the last five decades. I’m not saying everything is exactly the same as before, but the fundamentals have remained unchanged. People still work for material abundance and come to family and friends for emotional support. For example, fifty years ago, immigrants travelled across oceans to the United State for a better life. They were told to stay positive in times of hardship and follow through despite the odds, and they did. That’s the American Dream coming true. How about now? The pursuit of stability and security have never ceased and will continue to last for the years to come. Important values, like honesty, diligence and persistence, that have served the previous generations well, would undoubtedly bring out the best in us and illuminate the way. Let’s take the scope to a macro level. Throughout the years, there have always been wars breaking out in some parts of the world where old governments were toppled and new rulers came to power; epidemic diseases have still been plaguing lives, but people are always trying out new ways to cure them and save the day; the discrimination against race, gender or sexual orientation is still under spotlight, but people never stop fighting for justice and equality. So you can see all the major problems we have faced haven’t change that much; only the elderly who have seen it all can hit the mark.
Some may argue that technology is a game changer and grandparents who can hardly keep up with the times won’t be of any use to a tech-savvy kid. That being said, let’s not forget grandparents have more hands-on experience outside of electronic gadgets. Take myself for instance, while my grandpa is still writing letters, I see it as a nostalgic way of correspondence; I can take care of all my work E-mail just by tapping on my iPhone. It seems like I can handle it all on my own. But I could still remember my first business proposal. Even though I got a laptop, I was still at loss about how to lay out the proposal and ended up asking my grandpa for tips. As an English professor, he showed me the ropes about the writing formats and the correct way of addressing. Some might google it for answer, but that would lack a personal touch. With grandpa’s help, everything fell into place; the proposal turned out to be a success. The same goes for grandpa’s other techniques that I put into use later in life. So who cares of grandparents may not get the hang of technology? No matter how fast the world spins, their words of wisdom can always go a long way.
To sum up, I’m not asking you to follow the beaten path or dedicate to some old-fashioned lifestyle. All I’m saying is that grandparents are worth our full attention no matter how the world changes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...seen it all can hit the mark. Some may argue that technology is a game changer and g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2553.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 542.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71033210332 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55864947514 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 297.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547970479705 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 777.6 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9672597889 48.9658058833 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0344827586 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6896551724 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.10344827586 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128481194864 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0326359562341 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387498131798 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101609735012 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418763476475 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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