Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For any business to be successful, it must spend a lot of money on advertising.
Advertising is one of the most crucial aspects in the any successful buiseness undoubtly. It may introduce the business to the people who are not familiar to it, and a good advertising may cause winning a selling competition. unfortunately many business managers think that spending a lot of money on advertisement would be a waste of sources, but there are so many evidents that these kind of thinking will lead to failure. In my point of view, every business should allocate a proper amount of money for some kinds of advertisment in their annual budget, and I will explain my reasons, later in the essay.
First of all, investing some money on advertising a product or a business itself, will definitely return the money back, along with its profit. because when prople get more familiar with a product or business, the amount of potential costumers increases consequently. I will explore this idea with an example. About two years ago, I accidentlay find a sugar-free lemon soda in a grocery store. It was so delicious and the price was reasonable. I introduced it to my family and my friends and they all liked it a lot. but whenever I asked somebody about this product, I found out that almost nobody knows about it and due to the absence of proper adverising, people could not understand about the exsitance of this tasty soda. So after a year of not selling so much, the company had to stop its production and now there are none in the markets. That's why I think putting amount of money to introduce your product to the people is not a unprofitable investment.
Secondly, by the mean of advertisement you can win a competiton from your similar co-businesses. In a situation that two businesses are offering a similar service, or producing an anologous product, the one which is more popular among the people will get the most profit from the contest. For instance to demonstrate this idea clearly, there are two major automobile company in my country, IKCO and SAI, which their cars are almost identical to each other from the aspect of quality and appearance. From the beginnig, IKCO was always behind the SAI in selling thier cars. But from 10 years ago, the selling rate of IKCO started to increase gradually and now they put their competitor behind. When were asked about their key factor of their success, they expressed that they increase the budget of advertisement by 22%. So it can be seen that by investing on the advertising the business you can get ahead of your competitors.
To put it in a sum, I strongly support the idea that the businesses should spend a lot of money on the advertising, and I fell that way because by doing this, they can introduce their services and products to the puplic, and also win a competition from those who offer almost the same product or service. I highly recommend the managers to not afraid of investing on advertisement cause it brings you more profit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, may, second, secondly, so, for instance, i think, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2412.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74803149606 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77056282225 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472440944882 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 775.8 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9430705761 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.636363636 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0909090909 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68181818182 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154290672603 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430151202187 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447825578248 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106187945181 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394821855024 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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