Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should spend most of their time on studying and playing, and they shouldn’t be required to help family with household chores, such as cleaning and cooking.
Nowadays, different aspect of parenting has proven to be a pressing issue. Even though some people think kids should mainly spend their time on studying and playing because they will have plenty of time to do household chores, others do not agree with them. As far as I am concerned, the latter attitude carries more weight; In that, not only do children learn from simple chores around house, but also they mature so much faster. In-depth discussion on each of the abovementioned reasons is provided below.
The first reason which should be considered here is children learn a lot from doing simple chores in home. It is an undeniable fact that at this age, they learn so much faster, and by starting at this age they do all their stuff by the time they grow up. Take a personal experience as an example ; back in the past, when I was 6 years old, my mother started to ask me for simple chores in home, for instance cleaning my room or buying bread. It was simple tasks, but by doing them I learn different stuff and when I became 18 years old and went to college, I do not have any problem with living on my own in dormitory. Besides that, this kind of learning is not much there in the playing or studying any more. Most child spend their time on video game or on internet, and there is a lot of harmful content that could actually affect children inappropriately. So doing some chores means children getting away from this stuff and involving with real life.
One should consider this point from another angle, which is children mature much faster in this way. On the one hand they get more important role. In fact they feel they are not someone without any responsibility in house and everything is making ready for them. For instance, one child could learn if he/she do not buy some little stuff like bread, every body at lunch have to eat without bread. So they learn some other person rely on them. On the other hand, they would appreciate others, especially their parent, because they learn how all the thing around the house became ready by the efforts of parents. Most parents complaint about their children disrespectful behaviour,and this might be some way to teach their child how to behave.
In a word, by taking all of the aforementioned reasons into consideration, it is rational to draw the conclusion that parent should make their children some little chores in house from their young age. It is important to realize that trend of differents societies shows that by investing more on our children, we could expect better future for our country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, if, so, for instance, in fact, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6872246696 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4388019809 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519823788546 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9635453376 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.4 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230417221028 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072144970488 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657358405362 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153106494575 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655315108879 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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