Do you agree or disagree with following statement? Games are as important for adults as they are for children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout the history, there are a large number of entertainments for children such as comic strip and different kinds of games. Although some people adhere to this belief that game just has a pivotal role in children’s life, I strongly believe that games can have profound effects on adult’s life as same as children due to they can shed their tension and also, it helps to keep their brains active.
The first aspect to point out is that what provokes adult to play the game is releasing their stress. In fact, Human’s life is analogous to a tortuous way in a mountain in quite a few aspects. Actually, adults have a number of financial concerns and incomplete plans in their personal lives. Not only can they raise their self-confidence by passing game’s stages successfully, but also they will mentally get healthier by playing games. Take a case of a man who is in charge of a family of six and run into a huge problem in his life and is overwhelmed by stress for instance. He can take a break from his life’s failures and unwind by playing some action computer games with his children. A cheerful atmosphere during playing makes him more energetic and lively; hence, prospering in games and having endless hours of fun psychologically boost adult’s morale and help them to persevere in what they want to do.
A further more subtle point is that adults can keep their brains young by playing games. Undeniably, people’s minds, in their lifespans, little by little consume as time goes by. In fact, there are unlimited ways to reduce or delay adults’ brain’s depreciation; one of which is getting involved in intellectual games that they force adults to think more and more. To clarify more, consider puzzle games which improve several skills related to the brain such as, creativity, memorizing and navigating. According to recent research conducted in my country, psychologists are in the conviction that adults who play games at least every month are less likely to get Alzheimer in elder ages. Therefore, the importance of playing games for adults is equivalent to children.
On the whole, according to the above-mentioned points and details, it is crystal-clear (obvious) that playing games for adults are as important as for children since they can reduce stress by having sheer happiness for several hours, and also keep adults’ minds young. It is high time we stopped overlooking the fact that playing games leave profound effects just on children. It is anticipated that adults who are not playing games will become depressed and cannot make progress in their jobs.
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'therefore', 'as for', 'at least', 'for instance', 'in fact', 'such as', 'on the whole']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.247081712062 0.229887763892 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.155642023346 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0972762645914 0.0866891130778 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0505836575875 0.046263068375 109% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0525291828794 0.0685040099705 77% => OK
Prepositions: 0.120622568093 0.118717715034 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0466926070039 0.0351676179071 133% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88416040451 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0311284046693 0.0309702414327 101% => OK
Particles: 0.00194552529183 0.00188951952338 103% => OK
Determiners: 0.0486381322957 0.0887237588012 55% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0175097276265 0.0209618222197 84% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0175097276265 0.0139019557991 126% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2637.0 2387.08602151 110% => OK
No of words: 436.0 408.028673835 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.04816513761 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.355504587156 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.247706422018 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.18119266055 0.174417080927 104% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.126146788991 0.112833075102 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88416040451 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543577981651 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 63.5855957951 59.2087087015 107% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.2222222222 20.5533526081 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9998971193 48.84282405 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.5 120.699889404 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2222222222 20.5533526081 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.833333333333 0.644075263715 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 48.9928644241 45.7405998639 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.6015037594 1.45489161554 110% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263628032568 0.300154397459 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.115671920197 0.103427244359 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0702243891766 0.0752933317313 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.493596593189 0.497263757937 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.148119788481 0.151897553556 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105448465201 0.114077575197 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729030090237 0.0781384742642 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.412990478555 0.336927656856 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0504067636635 0.067059652881 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208950871408 0.210909579961 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508473087776 0.0618886996521 82% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.