Education plays the major role in one’s life. Being good educated will lead to better opportunity. That’s why education system has to be seriously discussed. Some people might say that letting high school student choose what they want to learn is better than force them to learn on the well-prepared schedule. This will make them more mature, independence and can responsible for their life. Some people argue that high school students are not mature enough to decide by themselves. As an adult, we have to assist them. Personally, the latter opinion seems to have rationale aspect in comparison to the former viewpoint. I will elaborate on my idea throughout the following paragraph.
First of all, letting the teenagers learn what they desire lead to narrowness of the knowledge. Students are likely to learn what they like or what they are good at. It seems good because they will specialize in that subject. However, they will lack of others knowledge, which might be also important in their life in the future. It would be better if we fix all essential subjects in the schedule and let it has a blank space in the schedule for some special subjects student want to learn more. For example, putting all essential classes in the morning and the early afternoon then let the late afternoon free for elective classes.
In addition to knowledge limitation, many students don’t know themselves well and don’t know what to they are going to be in the future. We have to think carefully about this point. If we have no guideline for them, these students can not think on their owns and will miss great opportunity. This will lead to many problems in the future. For example, my friend Anna she just found out that she want to be an accountant when she was in the 12 grade and she hasn’t enroll any Mathematics subjects before. Unfortunately, every universities require Mathematics for faculty of accounting. Therefore, she can’t attend the university or she has to study in the faculty she does not found of.
From the aforementioned above, it has clearly explained that student should study on every fundamental subject. Moreover, they should have right to choose their interested subjects as the elective courses. This would make student get good education and extend their imaginary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: subjects'; subject's
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...te afternoon free for elective classes. In addition to knowledge limitation, man...
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...y in the faculty she does not found of. From the aforementioned above, it has cl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for example, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04155844156 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72172100366 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7985396543 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.64 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111619225523 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327262687406 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431680698459 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0805637779397 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365622002763 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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