Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It has always been a disputable issue that humans have been seeking to make their lives more convenient and delightful. Many people think that a job with longer hours but fewer days a week is more satisfying and enjoyable. However, I think that a job with shorter hours has many merits, which I will point out some significant arguments to elaborate on this perspective.
One of the reasons coming to my mind at first has to do with the fact that a person needs motivation in order to be satisfied with his or her life. In other words, if a person wants to do his or her job in an excellent fashion, they must love their work and know that doing a task without any sufficient rest, will bring about them anxiety and uneasiness. Therefore, they must consider that they need enough rest to be happy as well as prepared for their next day work. Some of psychological research assert that motivation is one of the most important factors so as to encourage people to do something which emphasizes the value of motivation.
Another equally striking point in corroborating my viewpoint is that a job needs efficiency. Nowadays, there are manifold companies which compete against, and try to surpass each other. If a company does not have the ability to work efficiently, it will be busted. As a result, a company needs competent employees to keep pace with its opponents. Take programming workers who work in Apple Incorporated into account as an example. If its employees would not have worked efficiently, the company had not brave with its opponents. This aim cannot be obtained by longer hours of working, inasmuch as this manner will cause many faults for the people who undertake a task in a company.
In conclusion, based on the aforementioned arguments, there are many factors leading humans to have more comfortable lives. Take motivation as an essential need to be satisfied with work and efficient workers to lead the company to be succeeded into consideration. Workers must work five days a week for short hours rather than three days a week for longer hours.
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, as to, i think, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79831932773 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76435536533 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532212885154 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1329654244 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.764705882 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260732160171 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837191380399 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0843341076086 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169737462803 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648068870459 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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