Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The relationship between successful people and risk has never come into the light and there is actually no dedicated research on it. Some believe that taking risk is a juvenile thing to do and it potentially destroys what one has built over the lifespan. However, I Strongly believe that taking risk is a characteristic of successful people and I will explain my reasons in the following essay.
The most significant reason could be that risks widen your perspective toward yourself and your abilities. It is necessary to take risks once in a while and evaluate yourself out of your comfort zone. This is what makes a difference between a successful and an ordinary person. Successful people often have a thorough viewpoint of themselves, which is most of the time acquired by taking risks. This way they will have a better understanding of their abilities as well as their limits. The risks often start with baby steps and after they have the feedback they could better decide to go a further step or to cease the action. A perfect example of such a movement would be my friend, Sarah. Sarah used to work as an accountant and I have to admit that she was a good one. One day she decided to take some cooking classes up alongside her career. After a while she felt that she would perform better in cooking than in accounting therefore, she took the risk. She quit her job and started her new job in a confectionary. Now she has her own shop with over than ten employees and is expanding her business.
Secondly, I think that staying in the same place and not changing your direction would eventually lead to failure. I have seen a lot of start-up companies, starting with a lot of energy and new ideas. But the moment they reach to a relief point they stop taking risks anymore as they are afraid of losing money or their reputation over some bad products. I remember when the CEO of BAZIK, a company producing home gadgets in my country, announced that they would not enter the new market of Internet of things (IoT), just when IoT was going to be hyped. I could understand that he was afraid that, by entering the new market he would lose the costumers. However, the opposite happened. Costumers loved the idea of IoT and eventually when the company decided to use the technology it was too late. Even their loyal costumers were using their competitors' gadgets.
Long story short, I believe that taking risk is a mandatory characteristic of any successful person. It makes them aware of their potential and helps them find new avenues to the final success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 305, Rule ID: AFRAID_OF_HEIGHT[2]
Message: The noun should be probably in the plural form: 'moneys', 'monies'.
Suggestion: moneys; monies
...ks anymore as they are afraid of losing money or their reputation over some bad produ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, as to, i think, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66371681416 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60478198411 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519911504425 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9030146152 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.32 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.08 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235162033673 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580646423671 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424343740895 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140489626167 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564797553684 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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