DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH FOLLOWING STATEMENT TECHNOLOGY HAS THE GREAT EFFECT ON CHILDREN LIFE?.
It is a highly debated issue whether or not the Technology has made children less creative than in they were in the past and this can be approached from several angles due to its complexity. Deeply into the issue deliberating to the issue, personally, I believe that Technology beneficial to the children today rather than harmful to the creativity of them and the following discussion reveals my stand and reasoning.
First, Technology made the children taught themselves and not depending on their parents. For instance, take my son as an example, he is now four years old, and before he is entering the ECE he obtains a lot of knowledge and information, that is because he was watching the YouTube of nursing programs that give him the opportunity to learn the alphabetic and a lot of documentaries. Furthermore, his thinking and knowledgeable ability enhanced. While his big brother he is less interested in the technological devices, and sometimes he astonishes by the educational level of his younger brother.
Second, the technology made my son more productive, take my self as an example, last week I had to finish to design project for my art class and to prepare a presentation and extremely stuck in my project requirements. But my son Ashraf solved many of my obstacles and helped me to add additional design to my work even though he does not know about my major but he has an application on his self-phone that assist him to learn how to create shoes or canvas, and he is professional.
By way of conclusion, based on the argument explored above. I firmly concur that Technology made our children more expertise and worthwhile in their life
Comments
Essay evaluation report
I believe that Technology beneficial to the children
I believe that Technology is beneficial to the children
Technology made the children taught themselves
Technology made the children think themselves
While his big brother he is less interested in
While his big brother is less interested in
and sometimes he astonishes by the educational level of his younger brother.
and sometimes he is astonished by the educational level of his younger brother.
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flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2 //Read a good grammar book.
2. Don't always use personal examples.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 283 350
No. of Characters: 1346 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.756 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.899 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.3 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.119 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.645 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
It is a highly debated issue whether or not the Technology has made children less c...
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Line 4, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r children more expertise and worthwhile in their life
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Line 4, column 156, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... expertise and worthwhile in their life
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 283.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86572438163 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00677854225 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579505300353 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.3831063551 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.7 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0912268588747 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.048232137707 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527451528665 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.071322790341 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445035726331 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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