Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The telephone has greater influence on people’s lives than television has.
Nowadays, the world has changed in several ways and it could affect people's lives whether positive or negative. One of the biggest shifts in humans' life is technological aspects. Among a great number of inventions, some believe that telephone has the most important influence on people's life even more than television while others have a conviction that it has been an ordinary achievement or at least it has equal value with TV. I am unanimous with the first group because in my view, it has provided a wide range of merits which lead human beings to achieve their goals. The next paragraphs will vastly elucidate my vantage point through two salient reasons:
To begin with, nobody could overlook this fact that television is a one-way invention, as a matter a fact, TV is accounted as an entertainment tool. People can watch it and enjoy simply; however, the telephone is not just for amusement, but it gave communities a chance to progress. Take 100 years ago, the young people were not allowed to study in far universities by their families because if parents miss their children, they had to spend much money for meeting them. Or businesses were small and local. Latter with advent of telephone, families found dear to send the young to far distances even foreign countries to follow their aims. With pressing some keys, they could call their children easily. The business could connect to international markets and develop the quality of life in societies.
The second reason for my argument is lies the fact that telephone has had constructive consequences. As the technology kept marching forward, the new generation of telephone was introduced and it was called cell-phone or wireless phone. The aforementioned phones provide a variety of advantages for people. The young livings can share their private photos in a few second with their friends or they can communicate with strange people in all over the world. One should not forget that telephone could have improved interpersonal skills among the young. Since they can chat through their cell-phones and share some scientific documents or exchange their culture with each other; hence, the new, useful and close friendships could have formed.
To sup up, this conclusion could be drawn that telephone has had worthwhile impacts on our life because it allow us to remove our homesick. Even better we could have gained an opportunity to make new friendships through cell-phones and associate with new people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun second seems to be countable; consider using: 'few seconds'.
Suggestion: few seconds
...ngs can share their private photos in a few second with their friends or they can communic...
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Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'allows'?
Suggestion: allows
...rthwhile impacts on our life because it allow us to remove our homesick. Even better ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, look, second, so, while, at least, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08333333333 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70485203459 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593137254902 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5266400589 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.157894737 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4736842105 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149205331165 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432055665578 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039667241338 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.091211151609 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349835564976 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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