Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Nowadays, with the ubiquitous access to the Internet, the significance of the libraries has been fading. Indeed, on the Internet people can find all information they need barely in seconds right from the place they are at the moment. Conversely, in the modern dynamic world, the importance of participating in sports activities for people has been increasing. Therefore, I agree with the statement that educational institutions have to finance sports activities for their students not less than their libraries.
First of all, a sport is the great stress reliever. When people work physically, they let their brains get some rest and relax, which is crucial for the students, who learn continuously. Moreover, a variety of the sports activities is quite interesting and truly enjoyable for the participants. For example, when I was a student, I was in a college volleyball team. During the volleyball practicing, I was having a lot of fun with my teammates because we were joking around all the time, which made me forget for a while of all the college assignments and exams. If the college had not supported sports activities for the students, I could have simply drained in the stressful educational routine and felt constantly overwhelmed. Despite the opinion that while attending a college, students have to spend most of the time on learning, they still need some time off to keep up their studies. To that end, because of fo the great contribution of the sport to the student`s wellbeing, universities have to sponsor the activities.
Secondly, group sports activities help students to develop communication skills. These days, most of the business settings based on the teamwork. Therefore, having a capability of socializing quickly is indispensable in order to succeed in the workplace. Being a member of a sports team can teach young people to deal with others. For instance, as a member of the volleyball team, I learned about people`s behavior and how to adapt to different ones. In fact, after graduation the pharmacy school, I have never had problems with communication with my colleagues and patients. On the other hand, when students spend all time with books in the library and lack of an opportunity to socialize with their peers, they tend to become introverted persons, unable to communicate effectively. Therefore, taking part in the sports activities can be critical for students in practicing of building their connection in the society.
To conclude, I think that universities definitely have to fund libraries and sports activities for their students in the same degree. This is because, the sport is a great stress relieving tool for the students, which makes them socially adept.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2280.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18181818182 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01946508864 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520454545455 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1390823678 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.636363636 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.59090909091 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230601983209 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719012312331 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668944171095 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158922386105 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182799731876 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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