Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? "Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion."
I disagree with the statement that universities should give same amount of money to students' sports activities as they give to the libraries. The amount of money allocated should depend on various factors depending on the current need of the department .
Once I asked a friend a simple question that he could not answer . I asked him “ Do you like mangoes or chicken ?” The above question also takes us into a similar dilemma when comparing two unrelated departments. The Universities have two departments Sports and libraries, both are important for the holistic development of the students. Any student should have access to a library that is well stocked and provides access to diverse material. Similarly sports activities are important and college students should be able to access facilities for several sporting events .
Universities can review the condition of the sports activities on campus. They can do a head count of the number of students playing different sports. Coaches and student bodies can be consulted about the issues they are facing. Accordingly the funds can be allocated for students sports activities.Similarly after careful review money can be allocated for the library improvement and expansion. If it is found that students prefer to read books online like PDF format and are interested in online courses, then libraries could cut the budget for printed books.Investment in online educational platform membership Like Lynda.com for all the students can be more beneficial alternatively. There can be several strategies to wisely use the funds.
Some things can be bought by money but not all . I would conclude that instead of focusing on equal amount , Universities should look at other criteria for development of their sports department and Libraries . Thus giving same amount is not necessary.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, look, similarly, so, then, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 291.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31615120275 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01074496535 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560137457045 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.9256398715 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6875 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1875 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0625 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299223123536 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105949279232 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120265379605 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210274399661 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104888484079 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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